巴山夜雨 Ba Shan Ye Yu (1980)
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Nächtlicher Regen in den Bergen, auch bekannt als Evening Rain
Li Shangyin 李商隐
Der Filmtitel zitiert ein Gedicht von Li Shangyin, einem berühmten Dichter aus der späten Tang Dynastie. Es heißt Lines Sent to the North Written during Night Rains (EN) bzw. 夜雨寄北 (Ye Yu Ji Bei)
Jun wen gui qi wei you qi,
君问归期未有期.
Ba shan ye yu zhang qiu chi.
巴山夜雨涨秋池
He dang gong jian xi chuang zhu,
何当共剪西窗烛.
Que hua ba shan ye yu shi.
却话巴山夜雨时
May 17, 2019 - Yigong Wu & Yonggang Wu - Ba Shan Ye Yu aka Evening Rain (1980) | Cinema of the World
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This film had a deep influence upon China in the 1980s, as it was beginning to come to terms with the Cultural Revolution.
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Evening Rain, a feature film co-directed by Wu Yonggang and Wu Yigong, is about the years of the Cultural Revolution. Qiu Shi, a well-known poet, is wronged during that political movement. He is aboard a passenger ship bound for Chongqing from Wuhan under the guard of a young man and a young woman. In the third-class cabin, there is a village girl who has sold herself to repay her family debt, a woman teacher who speaks out from a sense of justice, an old actor who has had a full taste of suffering, an old woman who is on her way to commemorate her son killed in the violent factional struggle, and a righteous young worker. Each of them is laden with worries and sufferings. When they come to know Qiu Shi, they all show sympathy for him. Liu Wenying, the woman escort, is a simple, naive young woman. At the beginning, she thinks the persecuted poet is an out-and-out enemy. But what she hears and learns from the other passengers during the days and nights of the voyage makes her feel low, amazed, and awakened. She makes up her mind to save Qiu Shi. What makes the film unique is that although it was based on the persecution and sufferings of the people during the Cultural Revolution, it stresses the fine inner world of the ordinary people, their mutual concern and love, and their unshakable faith in the future. There was no evildoer on the screen, but the viewers could sense the sinful shadow in their own minds: the root cause of people’s sufferings. It seemed that this film aroused the people more and made them think more carefully about history than those films that directly showed the disasters caused by the Cultural Revolution. Evening Rain won the Outstanding Film Prize issued by the Ministry of Culture in 1980 and the Best Feature Film Prize at the First Golden Rooster Awards in 1981.
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Fourth Generation gets due at Rotterdam – The Hollywood Reporter
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JANUARY 24, 2008, BY JONATHAN LANDRETH, AP
BEIJING — The first major retrospective outside Asia of films made in China following the tumult of the Cultural Revolution opens Friday at the International Film Festival Rotterdam in the Netherlands, which runs Jan. 23-Feb. 3.
As the 2008 Beijing Olympics approach and China’s Communist government again tightens the reins on media, the retrospective will present films made from 1979-1989, in answer to former Chinese leader Deng Xiaoping’s call to open China up after decades when media equaled propaganda.
“This was the most culturally and politically open time in Chinese filmmaking. Even the semi-independent films today from people like Jia Zhangke have to be more subtle,” curator Shelly Kraicer said, referring to the director of 2006 Venice Grand Prize winner “Still Life,” which recently opened in the U.S.
Although the directors of these films — known collectively as the Fourth Generation — are well known within China, they have largely been overshadowed for foreign viewers by the works of the following Fifth Generation directors such as Zhang Yimou (“Raise the Red Lantern”), Chen Kaige (“Farewell my Concubine”) and Tian Zhuangzhuang.
Fourth Generation films represent a “fertile and creative, though sadly brief, era of Chinese cinema,” Kraicer said.
For “Rediscovering the Fourth Generation” at Rotterdam, Kraicer, Beijing-based editor of the electronic newsletter Chinese Cinema Digest, chose a dozen films made in the run up to 1989, when the student democracy movement was crushed by China’s army in Tiananmen Square.
From 1979’s melodramatic “Little Flower,” in which Zhang Zheng directs Joan Chen’s debut as a young woman seeking her long-lost brother during wartime, to Teng Wenji’s experimental 1984 film “At the Beach,” featuring the debut of actress Bai Ling, Kraicer said that the period saw directors stretching their craft in many directions after years in which virtually no films were made.
“Black Snow,” released in early 1984, is a tragedy about the demise of an ex-convict, played by Jiang Wen, China’s most famous actor, who cannot reintegrate into society. It is the darkest film about China ever to get past the censors and receive a theatrical release, Kraicer said.
“It would never get passed today,” said Kraicer, who will introduce festivalgoers to “Black Snow” director Xie, who will travel to Rotterdam with his film.
Director Teng will be present, too, as will the female director Huang Shuqin, whose 1987 “Woman Demon Human,” is considered by film scholars a prime example of one of China’s few feminist films.
From Jan. 25 to 29, the three directors and Kraicer plan to host a seminar on the Fourth Generation with the participation of Chinese cinema expert Tony Rayns.
It was not easy pulling the retrospective together, said Kraicer who, with Teng, spent a long time negotiating to get the sole surviving copy of “At the Beach” to Rotterdam from the Xi’an Film Studio.
The dozen films in retrospective will be screened on 35mm prints provided by the China Film Archive, the Xi’an and Shanghai Film Studios and the Emei Film Studio. Some are subtitled and some dubbed into English.
A complete list of Chinese Fouth Generation films at IFFR follows.
“Troubled Laughter” (Kunao ren de xiao), Yang Yanjin, Deng Yimin, 1979
“Little Flower” (Xiao Hua), Huang Jianzhong, Zhang Zheng, 1979
“Evening Rain” (Bashan yeyu), Wu Yigong, Wu Yonggang, 1980
“The Alley” (Xiaojie), Yang Yanjin, 1981
“River Without Buoys” (Meiyou hangbiao de heliu), Wu Tianming, 1983
“My Memories of Old Beijing” (Chengnan jiushi), Wu Yigong, 1983
“At the Beach” (Haitan), Teng Wenji, 1984
“Narrow Lane Celebrity” (Xiaoxiang mingliu), Cong Lianwen, 1985
“In the Wild Mountains” (Yeshan), Yan Xueshu, 1985
“Sacrificed Youth” (Qingchun ji), Zhang Nuanxin, 1985
“Woman Demon Human” (Ren gui qing), Huang Shuqin, 1987
“Black Snow” (Benming nian), Xie Fei, 1989
Nächtlicher Regen in den Bergen von Sichuan - Film ∣ Kritik ∣ Trailer – Filmdienst
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Melodram | VR China 1980 | 86 Minuten
Regie: Wu Yonggang
Menschen unterschiedlicher Herkunft erzählen ihre Schicksale, die durch die Herrschaft der „Roten Garden“ während der chinesischen Kulturrevolution (1966-1976) geprägt wurden. Im Mittelpunkt ein junger Dichter, der von zwei Rotgardisten zu seiner Verhandlung gebracht wird. Ein Film, der mit der Unterdrückung jener Jahre abrechnet - aber gleichwohl bemüht bleibt, auch von menschlichen Regungen der radikalen „Kulturrevolutionäre“ zu berichten. Trotz Gefühlsüberschwangs, gebündelter Zufälle und melodramatischer Inszenierung ein interessantes Dokument, das sich sehr überzeugend für ethische Grundwerte ausspricht.
Filmdaten
ORIGINALTITEL
BASHAN YEYU
PRODUKTIONSLAND
VR China
PRODUKTIONSJAHR
1980
REGIE
Wu Yonggang · Wu Yigong
BUCH
Ye Nan
KAMERA
Chao Weiye
MUSIK
Yao Die
DARSTELLER
Zhang Yu · Li Zhixing · Zhang Ming · Mao Weihui · Zhong Xinghuo
LÄNGE
86 Minuten
KINOSTART
–
GENRE
Melodram
Evening Rain
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Evening Rain (Chinese: 巴山夜雨) is a 1981 Chinese drama film which reflects the fight between Chinese people and the Gang of Four during the ten years of turmoil in China. It was directed by Wu Yonggang and Wu Yigong with Li Zhiyu, Zhang Yu, Lin Bin playing the leading roles. This movie won the first Golden Rooster Awards for Best Picture in 1981, a prize it shared with Xie Jin’s Legend of Tianyun Mountain.
Plot
During the time the "Gang of Four” is on the rampage in China, a poet named Qiu Shi who has been in prison for 6 years is secretly transferred from Sichuan to Wuhan by boat under the guard of Li Yan and Liu Wenying. They meet six passengers on the boat – a poor girl named Xing Hua who had to work as a prostitute to pay her debts, a just woman teacher, an old actor of Beijing Opera, a frail elderly woman who has just lost her son, a young worker who has a clear stand on what to love and what to hate, and a little girl in rags.
One night, feeling hopeless about her life, Xin Hua attempts suicide by jumping into the river. Qiu Shi saves her and uses his own experience to encourage the poor girl. All the people aboard are deeply moved by this brave poet, including Li Yan and Liu Wenying. It turns out that the girl in rags is Qiu Shi’s daughter. With the help of the passengers aboard, Qiu Shi with his daughter finally regain freedom.
Soundtrack
I’m a dandelion seed (我是一颗蒲公英种子)
Filming Locations
The Three Gorges
(DOC) Die Aufwertung der Menschlichkeit im postsozialistischen Film Evening Rain (Ba Shan Ye Yu | Natascha Urdich - Academia.edu
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A Comparative Study of the Three English Versions of Lines Sent to the North Written during Night Rains from the Perspective of Transitivity
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Ningning Wang, Hui Jia
Department of Foreign Languages, East China University of Science and Technology, Shanghai, China.
DOI: 10.4236/oalib.1106474 PDF HTML XML 119 Downloads 398 Views
Abstract
The poem Lines Sent to the North Written during Night Rains is one of the most famous poems of the late Tang poet Li Shangyin. It is widely favored by translators and has many English versions. Through the literature research, it is found that there are few studies of its English versions combined with the linguistic tool of transitivity. This paper aims to study the poem Lines Sent to the North Written during Night Rains and its three English versions from the perspective of system-functional linguistics, taking the concept of transitivity as a theoretical tool, supplemented by the theory of functional equivalence to evaluate the three English versions. According to the results of transitivity characteristic analysis and functional equivalence evaluation, it is found that keeping the transitivity characteristics of the original and the translation consistent is actually a kind of application and embodiment of the principle of functional equivalence, and the change of transitivity characteristics does not necessarily violate the principle of functional equivalence, because in specific circumstances, the transformation of process types can also help to achieve the effect of meaning equivalence, reproduce the artistic conception, and finally realize the goal of functional equivalence.
Keywords
Transitivity, English Versions, Lines Sent to the North Written during Night Rains
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Wang, N. and Jia, H. (2020) A Comparative Study of the Three English Versions of Lines Sent to the North Written during Night Rains from the Perspective of Transitivity. Open Access Library Journal, 7, 1-10. doi: 10.4236/oalib.1106474.
1. Introduction
With the wide application of system-functional linguistics, Chinese scholars have made many achievements in the study of transitivity and discourse analysis, such as the critical discourse analysis of news discourse based on various processes of transitivity system, the contrastive analysis of English and Chinese novel discourse from the perspective of transitivity, etc. While in the research direction of ancient poetry translation, most scholars widely use the perspective of “faithfulness, expressiveness and elegance” to compare and appreciate the translations. Professor Huang Guowen has selected six English versions of Qingming for the comparative study [1], and has successfully applied the system-functional linguistics to the study of poetry translation. Since then, scholars have also begun to study poetry translation from the perspective of transitivity, such as exploring the formal equivalence in the English translations of Song of a Roamer from the perspective of transitivity in system-functional linguistics [2], etc. In order to enrich the research field of comparative analysis of ancient poetry translation from the perspective of system-functional linguistics, this paper uses transitivity system as a theoretical tool, supplemented by the theory of functional equivalence as a criterion to evaluate the poetry translation, so as to objectively evaluate the effect of translation under the condition of equivalence and nonequivalence of transitivity characteristics between the translated text and the original text, and finally reveal the relationship between transitivity system and functional equivalence in translation.
2. An Overview of Transitivity Theory
System-functional linguistics explains language structure with language function and shows the idea that language has ideational function, interpersonal function and textual function [3]. The ideational function includes two parts: experiential function and logical function. Experiential function refers to the language expression of people’s various experiences in the real world (including the inner world). In other words, it reflects the factors such as what happened in the objective and the subjective world, the people and things involved, and the time and place related to them. The experiential function is mainly embodied by transitivity and voice. Halliday believes that transitivity system divides what people see, hear and do in the real world into several processes and shows them in the clauses, including six categories: material process, mental process, relational process, behavioral process, verbal process and existential process (seeing Table 1) [4]. The transitivity system of language is constituted by these six processes, revolving around these processes are participants and circumstances, which should also be taken into consideration.
3. The Significance of Transitivity System and Functional Equivalence Theory in Chinese Ancient Poetry Translation Evaluation
The systemic functional grammar created and developed by Halliday provides a
Process
Meaning
Participant
Example
Material process
A process of doing
Actor-Goal
My brother built all these houses.
Mental process
A process of thinking
Senser-Phenomenon
She likes the gift.
Relational process
A process of being
Attributive: Carrier-Attribute
The cat is on the mat.
Identifying: Identifier-Identified
Sarah is the wise one.
Behavioral process
A process of behaving
Behaver
He sighed for the day of his youth.
Verbal process
A process of saying
Sayer-Verbiage-Receiver
She asked me a lot of questions.
Existential process
A process of existing
Existent
There is a pen on the desk.
Table 1. The six process types of transitivity system.
new perspective for the evaluation and analysis of ancient poetry translation. The transitivity system in systemic functional grammar is a semantic system to express the ideational function, it is a systematic network about the process types, participants and circumstances [3]. The purpose of transitivity analysis is to analyze the experiential meaning of the text, and to find out the main content of the text by analyzing the types of process and participants [5]. Although there are plenty of translations of famous ancient poems, there are few studies on poetry translation evaluation from the perspective of transitivity. In order to enrich the research field of comparison and appreciation of ancient poetry translation from the perspective of system-functional linguistics, it is necessary to use transitivity system and functional equivalence theory to study poetry translation, so as to objectively evaluate the effect of translation under the condition of equivalence and nonequivalence of transitivity characteristics between the translated text and the original text, and finally explore the relationship between transitivity system and functional equivalence theory.
Eugene Nida has pointed out the different stages of the theory of functional equivalence: the low-level, realistic “functional equivalence” and the high-level, ideal “functional equivalence”. Nida believes that the effect of translation can not only be judged by comparing the meaning, grammar and rhetoric of the translated text and the original text, but also by the target readers’ correct understanding and appreciation of the translation [6]. Based on Nida’s functional equivalence theory and the special literary genre of ancient poetry, it is easy to find that the translation of ancient poetry should be equivalent to the original in meaning, style and culture. Generally speaking, the realization of meaning equivalence refers to the selection of appropriate words to convey the meaning of the source language; the realization of style equivalence refers to the reproduction of the original images; the realization of cultural equivalence refers to the correct translation of allusions and the transmission of cultural information. These three standards can help to objectively compare and appreciate the English versions of ancient poems, make the translation quality evaluation of ancient poems more evidence-based, and help to comprehensively judge which translation can achieve the effect of making the target readers understand the original poems accurately.
4. Lines Sent to the North Written during Night Rains and Its Three English Versions
Li Shangyin is a famous Chinese poet in the late Tang Dynasty. As his representative lyric poem, Lines Sent to the North Written during Night Rains is full of touching emotional glamor. The original poem is as follows (with Pinyin):
Ye Yu Ji Bei
夜雨寄北
Jun wen gui qi wei you qi,
君问归期未有期，
Ba shan ye yu zhang qiu chi.
巴山夜雨涨秋池。
He dang gong jian xi chuang zhu,
何当共剪西窗烛，
Que hua ba shan ye yu shi.
却话巴山夜雨时。
This poem is a seven-character quatrain (four-line poem with seven characters per line) written by Li Shangyin to his wife in Chang’an when he lived in Bashu (ancient cities in Sichuan). At that time, the poet was stuck in Bashu area because of the autumn rain. His wife sent letters from home to ask about his return date. The first two sentences of the poem, with the question and answer and the description of immediate environment, convey the poet’s loneliness and deep concern for his wife. In the last two sentences, he imagined the joy of meeting again in the future, which serves as a foil to the loneliness of night. The meaning of the whole poem is: You ask me the date of my return, but my return date has not been set yet. Tonight’s Mount Pa, with continuous autumn rain, the pool is overfull with water. When can we trim a candlewick together near the west window, and tell the story of the night rain on Mount Pa today? The poem is improvised to express the poet’s sudden mood changes. The language is simple, and there is no trace of modification in the choice of words and sentences. It is different from most of Li Shangyin’s poems in terms of rhetoric and diction. In contrast, this poem is plain and natural, delicate in feelings, and graceful in artistic conception. Many translators and scholars have translated this famous poem of Li Shangyin, including the British Sinologist Herbert Allen Giles, the well-known Chinese litterateur Lin Yutang, and Xu Yuanchong, a famous translator of Chinese ancient poetry. They are highly-educated and keen on Chinese literature, while all have different specialized directions. What’s more, because of the different nationality, Herbert Allen Giles may also provide some particular understanding and explanation of this poem, therefore, their three English versions have great significance in the comparative study of Chinese ancient poetry translations from the perspective of transitivity system. The three English versions chosen as the research materials are as follows (seeing Table 2) [7].
4.1. The Translation of “君问归期未有期”
Version 1: You ask when I’m coming: alas not just yet…
Version 2: You ask how long before I come. Still no date is set.
Version 3: You ask me when I can return, but I don’t know.
There are two verbal processes in the first sentence of version 1. In this sentence, “alas not just yet...” is preceded by a colon, as if the poet is answering, which conforms to the “question and answer” in the original meaning. In addition, the sigh of “alas” shows the author’s helplessness in not knowing the date of return, and the ellipsis at the end of the sentence indicates that the date of return is hard to be determined and far away, which better achieve the meaning equivalence with the original.
Version 2 translates the first sentence of the original text into two sentences, showing a verbal process and a material process, and the material process “still no date is set” presents an objective fact that the date of return is not determined, and also vividly shows the scene of “question and answer” between wife and husband. From the aesthetic point of view, it fully reflects the unity of poetry and artistic conception in the original text, and accurately conveys the connotation of “the date of return is difficult to be determined”.
Version 3 translates the first sentence into a compound-complex sentence, which shows a verbal process and a mental process. Compared with version 1 and version 2, the word “return” better reflects the meaning of going back home. Besides, the mental process of “but I don’t know” also succinctly and vividly conveys the helplessness of the poet when he was stuck in a place far away from home.
To sum up, version 1 is equivalent to the original text in transitivity characteristics, while version 2 and version 3 are not fully in line with the transitivity characteristics of the original poem, but all the three versions have achieved the goal of meaning equivalence. That is to say, the transformation of process types may not influence the effect of achieving meaning equivalence and the connotation of the source language can also be reproduced. Since the first sentence of the original poem does not contain the images and allusions, the style equiva-
Herbert Allen Giles: Version 1
Lin Yutang: Version 2
Xu Yuanchong: Version 3
You ask when I’m coming: alas not just yet...
How the rain filled the pools on that night when we met!
Ah, when shall we ever snuff candles again,
And recall the glad hours of that evening of rain?
You ask how long before I come. Still no date is set.
The night rains on Mount Pa swell the autumn pool.
When shall we, side by side, trim a candle at the west window,
And (we) talk to the time of the night rains on Mount Pa?
You ask me when I can return, but I don’t know;
It rains in western hills and autumn pool o’er-flow.
When can we trim by
window side the candlelight
And talk about the western hills in rainy night?
Table 2. Three English versions of Lines Sent to the North Written during Night Rains.
lence and cultural equivalence between the translations and the original are not judged temporarily. It is easy to find that the three versions basically achieve the functional equivalence with the original text, which reflects that the change of transitivity characteristics does not necessarily violate the principle of functional equivalence.
4.2. The Translation of “巴山夜雨涨秋池”
Version 1: How the rain filled the pools on that night when we met!
Version 2: The night rains on Mount Pa swell the autumn pool.
Version 3: It rains in western hills and autumn pool o’er-flow.
In version 1, the exclamatory sentence started with “how” is used to show a mental process and a material process. In the literal sense, it means that “on that night when we met the heavy rain filled the pools”, obviously, “filled” and “met” are in the past tense, and the misuse of tense causes the dislocation of time and space, which hides the poet’s description of the scene before his eyes, thus destroys the artistic conception shown in the original text. However, if the translation is adjusted to “How the rain on Mount Pa fills the autumn pools tonight!”, it will not only keep consistent with the participants and circumstantial elements of the original, but also retain the characteristic of the combination of emotion and scenery in the original text.
Version 2 takes “巴山夜雨” as a whole part and translates it into “the night rains on Mount Pa”. In this sentence, the word “swell” not only expresses the meaning of “water level rises” in the original text, but also implies the poet’s deep concern for his wife. What’s more, every word in translation corresponds to the original text, without any additional translations or omissions. The original images of “the night rains on Mount Pa” and “the autumn pool” are completely displayed in front of the readers, which help to achieve the goal of style equivalence with the original, so that the readers can feel the artistic conception of the original text in a better way.
In version 3, the second sentence of the original text is separated into “it rains in western hills” and “autumn pool o’er-flow”, which form two material processes. “It” is set as the subject of the impersonal verb, and juxtaposes the subject-predicate structures of “it rains” and “autumn pool o’er-flow”. The word “o’er-flow” also well embodies the feature of the original poem, which turns the poet’s deep concern for his wife into an overflowing pool. “巴山” originally refers to the Daba Mountain (at the junction of the south of Shaanxi and the northeast of Sichuan), and in the old times, it refers to a very remote place. Here, the word “巴山” is translated into “western hills”. Although it is easy to be understood in geographical position, it may be confused with “西山 (western hills in the literal sense)” in place name. “巴山” has the implication of being relegated to a desolate place. Although this implication is not easy to be embodied in the translation, the literal translation method is a more practical way to reflect this place name.
It is easy to find that version 2 is better than version 1 and version 3 in terms of meaning equivalence, and because of the accurate grasp of images and the literal translation of the word “巴山”, version 2 is also better in terms of style equivalence and cultural equivalence with the original text. It can be seen that if the circumstantial elements such as place and time contained in the original text are omitted or mistranslated, it may influence the effect of functional equivalence between the translated text and the original text. Therefore, it can be concluded that keeping the transitivity characteristics of the original text (including the participants and circumstantial elements) in the translation is helpful to reproduce the artistic conception of the source language and achieve the goal of functional equivalence.
4.3. The Translation of “何当共剪西窗烛”
Version 1: Ah, when shall we ever snuff candles again.
Version 2: When shall we, side by side, trim a candle at the west window.
Version 3: When can we trim by window side the candlelight.
Version 1 is roughly equivalent to the original poem in terms of transitivity characteristics, but it lacks a place element“西窗 (the west window)”, which causes the inadequacy in circumstantial elements and a lack of background to set off the emotion by contrast. In terms of the translation of “剪”, “snuff” is “to extinguish a light from a naked flame, especially a candle”. In traditional Chinese culture, the word “剪烛” means “cut off the extra wick to maintain the bright lighting”, and then this behavior is set as the allusion of having a heart to heart night talk. In this aspect, the meaning of “snuff candles” is quite different from that of the word “剪烛”. From the perspective of functional equivalence, it does not achieve the goal of cultural equivalence with the original poem, which causes the inadequacy of the original artistic conception.
Version 2 is almost equivalent to the original poem in transitivity characteristics, and takes “side by side” as the parenthesis to fully express the meaning of the character “共 (get together)” in the original poem. The word “剪烛” in this sentence is translated into “trim a candle”, which is not in line with the original meaning of “trim the extra wick of candle”. In this aspect, the cultural equivalence is not well achieved. By contrast, using the phrase “trim the candlewick” to express the original meaning is more appropriate.
Similar to version 2, the meaning of “trim the candlelight” in version 3 is not equivalent to the meaning of “剪烛” in the original text. What’s more, “by window side” means “by the window”, while the explanation of the location of window has not been reflected in the translation. In traditional Chinese literature, “west window”, as a unique literary image, is just like the phrase “west wind”. In “east, south, west, and north” and “spring, summer, autumn, and winter”, the contrast between “west” and “autumn” reflects a feeling of sadness. In order to express the sorrow of separation, Chinese poets often use the image of “west window” to set off the emotion by contrast. However, in this translation, there is a lack of artistic conception reproduction, which results in the lack of style equivalence between the translation and the original.
To sum up, from the perspective of process type of transitivity, all the three versions are consistent with the original text. However, in the aspect of participant’s confirmation, for the word “剪烛”, all the three translators have not provided a translation that conforms to the cultural allusion contained in the original text, so their translations have not achieved the goal of cultural equivalence with the original. What’s more, in the translation of the word “西窗”, version 1 and version 3 have different degrees of omissions, which result in the lack of artistic conception conveyed by the image of “west window”, and also fail to achieve the meaning and style equivalence with the original poem. Obviously, there is a positive correlation between transitivity system and translation functional equivalence. Keeping the transitivity characteristics of the translation and the original consistent is actually an application and embodiment of the principle of functional equivalence, which is helpful to make the structure and expression effect of the translation similar to the original. In other words, it will result in the differences between the transitivity characteristics of the translation and the original if the cultural background of the original text is not fully understood, and ultimately the goal of functional equivalence between the translation and the original text cannot be achieved.
4.4. The Translation of “却话巴山夜雨时”
Version 1: And recall the glad hours of that evening of rain?
Version 2: And (we) talk to the time of the night rains on Mount Pa?
Version 3: And talk about the western hills in rainy night?
Version 1 translates “却话” into “recall”, which shows a mental process. In the original text, the meaning of the word “却话” is “tell about the past”, which shows a verbal process. Although version 1 is not consistent with the original text in the process type, it can better achieve the meaning equivalence with the original when it is unable to find the corresponding word in English. However, the translation “recall the glad hours of that evening of rain” deviates from the original meaning. In the last two lines of the poem, the poet envisages the future reunion. On the day of meeting, the poet will tell the sadness of departure of that night again, which is contrasted with the joy of imagining the future reunion. However, this translation recalls the past, and once again causes the dislocation of time and space, which results in the disappearance of the artistic conception created by the contrast of the time and space in the original text.
In version 2, the sentence “巴山夜雨时” is translated into “the time of the night rains on Mount Pa”. In this translation, each word corresponds to the original text, which reproduces the original image without any additional translations or omissions, and achieves the goal of meaning equivalence and style equivalence with the original text. However, the phrase “talk to” means “speak to (someone)”, while in the translation, the phrase “talk to” is connected with a noun phrase, which is not in line with English grammar.
Version 3 is basically equivalent to the original in transitivity characteristics, while in the translation of “却话”, the phrase “talk about” seems to refer to a usual behavior. Due to the meaning of “tell about the past” in the original text, in contrast, the word “recall” can better convey the original meaning.
To sum up, compared with the word “却话” in the original text, the use of “recall” in version 1 makes the process type change from verbal process to mental process, but it better conveys the meaning of “tell about the past” in the original text and achieves the goal of meaning equivalence. Take version 2 as an example, if replace “talk to” with “recall”, that is, “And (we) recall the time of the night rains on Mount Pa?”, then the translation will basically achieve the functional equivalence with the original. On the whole, version 2 does better in meaning equivalence, style equivalence and cultural equivalence with the original text. This part of the analysis once again reflects that the change of transitivity characteristics does not necessarily violate the principle of functional equivalence, because in specific circumstances, only through the transformation of process types can the translator better reflect the differences between the source language and the target language, and better express the artistic conception of the source language.
5. Conclusion
Based on the above study of transitivity and functional equivalence, it is found that each of these translations has its own advantages and disadvantages. Compared with the translators using target language as the first language, the translators using source language as the first language can better understand the meaning, artistic conception and emotion of the original text. In the comparison of these three English versions, it is found that Lin Yutang’s translation is slightly better than the others. His translation not only keeps the transitivity characteristics consistent with the original for the most part, but also faithfully conveys the core connotation of the original poem, and basically achieves the effect of meaning equivalence, style equivalence and cultural equivalence. In the process of comparing the results of transitivity characteristic analysis and functional equivalence evaluation, it is found that keeping the transitivity characteristics of the translation and the original consistent is actually an application and embodiment of the principle of functional equivalence, which makes the structure and expression effect of the translation similar to the original. Although the deviations in translation caused by the differences between the source language and the target language still exist, this kind of influence can be offset by the full understanding of the original text and the accurate expression of the translation. What’s more, the change of transitivity characteristics does not necessarily violate the principle of functional equivalence, because in specific circumstances, the transformation of process types can also help to achieve the effect of meaning equivalence, reproduce the artistic conception, and finally achieve the goal of functional equivalence. This paper makes a comparative study of the three English versions of Lines Sent to the North Written during Night Rains from the limited perspective of transitivity, and explores the relationship between transitivity system and functional equivalence. In the field of translation study from the perspective of system-functional linguistics, it is still a preliminary attempt. In the future, it is meaningful to make further research on the translation of ancient poetry from the perspectives of interpersonal function and textual function in system-functional linguistics, so as to expand the effective means of evaluating the translation quality of Chinese ancient poetry.
Acknowledgements
This paper is supported by the project of “Courses for cultivating innovation and entrepreneurship (2019)” of East China University of Science and Technology.
Conflicts of Interest
The author declares no conflicts of interest regarding the publication of this paper.
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